She kept her orbs fixed on the last letters as they were blurry yet dry because of the tears he cried while shutting the diary.. She caressed the blue ink split on the end which was the imprint of the pen, which dropped down while his hands were done with his name.
Silent tears were making their way down her eyes and wetting up the path over the cheeks and dropping on her hands. She locked the box after keeping the letter inside and rested her back against the wall, lifeless. Her throat chocked, seeing his photo, hung on the wall having the wreath on it, she kept weeping while digesting the fact that he was gone and that was meant to be.
His words echoed her ears and she gently shut her eyelids calling his name "Aryan.." with utmost love and pain. Her hands went up touching his face and then feeling his lips on her forehead for a second... The world of her future flashed making her shudder and she found herself all alone after opening her eyes.. She walked towards their cupboard and took out his belongings and felt all that again.. She hugged his shirt close to her and cried, screaming why he left her! She shook the pillow on which he kept his head n slept, and asked why he didn't take her with him. Her heartbeat rose and she exhaled her breaths clenching his things tightly.
She kept repeating "I miss you... Take me.. I... love... you... Aryann.. " till her lips stopped moving, her eyes went dim and she breathed silently getting into a deep slumber where she could find their togetherness , where she could have the courage to smile and only the place he was meant to be living...
Great one Sakshi! Very vivid text. As soon as you said red box the whole scene in my imagination was having a redder tint. Which made the scene powerful. Powerful imagery always makes the text rich. Nicely done
ReplyDeleteI would recommend you spending some time on learning the right grammar though. Simple things like should you use 'since' or 'from' go unnoticed. While writing. But are a little distracting for the reader who knows the right grammar.
Also you can look up a website called wattpad. People submit their own novels Nd stories there and you will find lot of inspiration.
Good going dear. Best luck
Tejesh Bhai
Thanks a lot bhai. Will surely work on it :)
Deletewow the story stunned me its a kind that holds u frm the starting till the very end.......its a beautiful story u should definetly write a novel and i can bet it will become a bestseller...........and i promise i'll be the 1st one to buy it.........u r an awsum writer keep up the good work all the best sakshi............
ReplyDeleteThanks a lot Tanya :) It means a lot ^_^
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